And oof...who has dueling who doesn't also have rules that it's highly improper to challenge someone so clearly inferior physically to a physical duel? Shouldn't she have had choice of weapon? If she's smart, shouldn't she have picked something less...personal? I'm thinking maybe sniper rifles? :)

That said, I'm interested in the world and the characters, so there's some good stuff there. Tidied, it'd make a nice pull from the book for a back cover quote.